can I.....?  

rm_rabbit8747 38F
129 posts
2/23/2006 4:50 pm

Last Read:
3/5/2006 9:27 pm

can I.....?


Post poetry on here. How lame you think. I don't know cause I have read a lot of bad poetry, but still......here's a start. what's in my heart.

“Discovery”

There is a blanket I wrap around my body for warmth.
Clean sheets that are cool
Like the underside of a pillow.
I lay down
One hand beside my face, one underneath,
Close my eyes
And think of you.

There is a summer dress of silk that looks like the sea.
Floating around my body,
Falling against my skin.
A breeze underneath
Myself within.
Delicate, free
And close to me.

I put my foot inside a steaming bath, onto a porcelain floor.
Sliding in, I’m warm and naked.
What would it be?
How would you slide in me -
Naked and seen
With the water rising, wet,
And in between?

There is a treasure that I found in an unexpected place.
I ran my fingertips across its lid.
“Precious,” I said.
I asked if it would open, and it did.
I took out items piece by piece -
Careful with each I turned
In my hand
And saw
With my heart.

Jeepidiot 43M

2/23/2006 5:14 pm

Clean sheets that are cool
Like the underside of a pillow.

Love that line. And here I thought I was the only person that noticed the underside of a pillow was cool so you just flip it over. Wonderful feeling.

People that can write good poetry have so much more talent than I could ever hope to have. I can't seem to get past the need to try and rhyme eveything.


shygoodlkr115718 57M

2/23/2006 5:39 pm

I love your poem. It definitely stirred me. I've always admired creative people regardless of medium - painting, drawing, words, etc.

Bob


spinmedown 50M
3626 posts
2/23/2006 5:47 pm

The warmth of your bed holds you.

The silken dress enfolds you.

The bath envelopes you
Embracing your lover.

What does your heart hold?

Most people are other people... FUCKING CHARACTER LIMIT!!! ~Oscar Wilde


saddletrampsk 55F

2/23/2006 6:17 pm

very nice..hope you continue to write more..


sweetSinn2690
2943 posts
2/23/2006 6:34 pm

very nice wording..i like it...i like to write poetry too, always have but now that i am a blogger i seem to be writing more and more...it's nice to be able to express youself and share it with others..xo


Oh WHATEVER BITCHES!


sweetSinn2690
2943 posts
2/23/2006 6:36 pm

very nice wording..i like it...i like to write poetry too, always have but now that i am a blogger i seem to be writing more and more...it's nice to be able to express youself and share it with others..xo

wasn't sure if this went thru so sorry if it posts twice


Oh WHATEVER BITCHES!


CantonOhCouple 61M/61F
553 posts
2/23/2006 7:12 pm

Very nice piece. We very much enjoyed it.

Hugs from CantonOhCouple.


Skymiles61 56M

2/24/2006 2:33 am

Simply beautiful. I am trying to work on my creativity, but in other mediums, such as photography. I don't know if it is an effort for you, but regardless, your writing is beautiful. And no, poetry is not lame, IMHO.


75gunner 42M

2/24/2006 9:40 am

Rabbit i have truly missed talking to you. Have i done something wrong or made you not want to talk with me at all? Please let me know and send me a message sometime ok. I could really use a good talk.

Grant


aascrompn 43M
6444 posts
2/24/2006 1:35 pm

I just know that you're talking about my bad poetry... This was very nice!!


Jeepidiot 43M

2/24/2006 5:26 pm

Lucky guy. Maybe one day i'll be an inspiration to some woman. Has to be better than being an irritation.


shygoodlkr115718 57M

2/24/2006 5:56 pm

Ahhh...the simple things in life that bring great joy...I couldn't agree more. Among the simple things that touch me...
Watching her eyes light up when she sees you...seeing a smile form on her face
Simply holding the woman you love in your arms and not wanting to ever let go
Looking into her pretty eyes and caressing her face while she is laying her head my lap
Pillow talk before heading to bed to night
Snuggling in bed under the warm covers on a cold and lazy Saturday morning
Watching a good movie - spooning style
Holding hands
Slow dancing
Little thoughtful gestures that let you know she sincerely cares
Getting a card that you can tell she spent a lot of time trying to find the right one
Taking a walk in the woods enjoying the beauty of nature
Baby daughter asleep on my chest
Acting like a kid - having fun in the sprinkler or coloring Easter eggs
Watching the sun set at the beach


shygoodlkr115718 57M

2/25/2006 1:16 pm

Rabbit...I've three words for you...you INSPIRE me!



Bob


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