The Greatest Ever  

rm_hotmamaNcols 40F
460 posts
3/19/2006 1:39 am

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4/26/2006 9:24 am

The Greatest Ever

Your kiss, lustful sensation,
Beautiful trepidation, as I'm
Chasing, tasting your tongue.
Your touch, definite connection,
No useless hesitation as I
Succumb to what was numb but never gone.
You smile at my elation as I
Forget my aggravations as you
Chance this dance you know was meant to be.
Your eyes tell me intentions,
As I gaze at my reflection,
I live to give you every piece of me.
Moaning, delicious injections,
Salty beads of perspiration,
I adore that you explore every inch of what is yours.
Your body, sinful addiction,
The tangled positions I envision,
I delight at the sight of the mingling of our souls,
Rapid pacing, smooth precision,
Penetrating deeply like a piston,
I yearn to earn my turn, ready to explode.
In your arms exhausted interaction,
Feeling all our last contractions,
I dream this scene with you will never end,
this feels like home....

I wrote this a long time ago. Tell me what you think, I'm up for some good ol'constructive critisism.

p.s. I would love to feel that way again (sigh).

MONA_14 31F

3/19/2006 11:48 am

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iluv2eatpussy94 54M

3/22/2006 1:38 pm

WOW!! It has taken me a few minutes to catch my breath before I can post a comment. Your writing is as vivid as my imagination, and both together is a little dangerous. I thought it was wonderful as written. Did you write if for a song, poem or maybe a lover? Wish I could see my reflection in your eyes and see your expression while penetrating deeply like a piston. Do pistons penetrate thae deeply?

rm_hotmamaNcols replies on 4/10/2006 5:02 pm:
I wrote it about the greatest lover I ever had. Then converted it into a song, back in my band days.

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