too write, to right  

rm_doublewood12
1 posts
6/13/2006 11:52 pm

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6/28/2006 8:51 pm

too write, to right


i want to be me.
others corrupt how i feel.
i'm myself the same.

haiku 5-7-5

it's easy to write the right thing. as long as you don't care. the right thing makes you feel good about yourself, makes you feel important.. the words feel important.
to feel important is what most people want.
importance. the act of being that. what does importance mean? importance... you say it enough times and it loses all importance... loses all meaning. it is only an idea... only a sound.
i want more than that. i care. i just have a problem coming up with the important words/ideas.

OcelotScratch 49M
286 posts
6/14/2006 12:17 am

The poem is quite nice; I like it. However, it is not a haiku, as a haiku has not only the 5-7-5 pattern, but must also contain a reference to nature. You have written a senryu, and a damned fine one.

Yes, I am a pedant.


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