Penny of my thoughts  

rm_____Jake__ 47M
181 posts
9/9/2006 5:15 pm

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5/27/2009 2:53 am

Penny of my thoughts

Flip, flip, flip
Like a coin toss I make these choices
The stains of my addictions mark the shallowness,
And keeps the clean away.
Sip away another friend,
and feel blood crash from under me.
South of the border happiness
has all but abandoned me again.
Melody is all that's left, she rides along
and brings back the harmony of the past.
The floor lies littered with pocket change,
a fortune wasted on thought.

Isabella927 31F

9/9/2006 5:53 pm

Hi, thank you for writing this, it is quite beautiful. I liked your first three verses, especially the third, "the stains of my addictions mark the shallowness", I understand what you're saying since I can relate. I also really liked your last two verses, a metaphor I take it, but a perfect one.


rm_____Jake__ 47M
134 posts
9/10/2006 7:30 pm

Thank you Isabella
I am glad you enjoyed it

pearlnecklace22 54F
41 posts
9/11/2006 6:15 am

well said Jake

Suicidia 51F

9/13/2006 5:41 pm

Sir, very poignant, and more than a little sad. Well said.

rm_____Jake__ 47M
134 posts
9/15/2006 7:36 pm

ty my friend ana
it is what came out.

wickedeasy 68F  
31113 posts
9/16/2006 3:26 pm

hands Jake some Tp

excellent - bloody fucking excellent

You cannot conceive the many without the one.

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