More great AFF/Passion writing  

KunningLingual1 60M
27 posts
6/7/2006 9:57 pm

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More great AFF/Passion writing

Ahhh back to my poor ignored blog! I tend to write longer things, so it takes a bit of time to write them with some style and panache. I thought maybe if I tried doing a few shorter random postings I might get back into it a bit more, so here goes...

I was perusing the Magazine section, sidestepping the "no penis pictures" posts and the "my dick is so big" posts, when I encountered this little gem. It was a story, cut-and-pasted from another site, judging by the formatting. The erotic content of the story was okay, nothing special unless you're really into , humiliation and drug-induced forced submission, but the writing.....ooooooo, the writing....the horror of it all!!!

The first sentence alone is absolutely amazing in its god-awful horridness. It's awful in a joyously amazing way, because I have no doubt the writer seriously believes this was a wonderful piece of prose. So here goes:

"Blackjack clung like a beachside fishing village to the ash gray desert that sprawled as far as the eye could see toward the craggy-hewn peaks of the Kingston Range, a motley collection of sun-parched ridges in the southern end of the California Sierras."

Ick. Make my skin crawl.

How about this gem:

"Sarah was truly happy now, she was finally doing something wild and exciting, just like all her girlish daydreams when she was in high school back
in Utah, dreaming of a life somewhere filled with reckless deeds and adventure, instead of endless piles of dirty dishes and a smelly man's socks draped over the shower curtain."

ARRRRGGGHHHHHHH!!!

You can bet it's also filled with cocks spewing like geysers and breasts compared to melons in every way possible. It's dreadful hackneyed stuff spewing with overwrought adjectives and subordinate clauses from hell.

"Animal Girl," winner of today's purple prose award, I salute you!


jasonabadboy4u 30M

6/27/2006 3:29 pm

So you are insecure of those of us that actualy get noticed? Have respect for your betters BOY!


KunningLingual1 60M

6/27/2006 9:48 pm

Please try again, your syntax and grammar are horrendous. Of course, a quick perusal of jason's blog reveals a litte evil wannabe, ooooo, he's so scary with his ridiculous satanic bible, marilyn manson cds, poorly written horror stories, pretentious little poems and stuck CAPS LOCK. To make it even funnier, the sorry little wanker deleted my comments on his blog. He asked for input, and then was unable to accept it.

Pathetic.


jasonabadboy4u 30M

7/1/2006 8:44 am

You look like a child molester. Are you one?


rm_mm0206 70F
7767 posts
8/5/2006 11:17 pm

oh well another one bit the dust......

tender hugs Kunning

everytime I see that you have looked at my wasteland of a profile, I wonder.....why?
but I am grateful anyway..
tenderly....m.


Slash19732003 44M

10/18/2006 6:43 am

I like what you said about mistered0950 .... the fakest dick on AdultFriendFinder !! Haha


Jusdewit8 54F

9/18/2007 5:38 am

I see MrJason has been removed...THAT'S good news!

I'm gonna give ya bad news...

You've been tagged---YOU'RE IT!

Sorry...

Once you have been tagged, you have to write a post containing Ten Weird or Random Things, Facts, Habits or Goals concerning yourself. At the end choose 10 people to be tagged, listing their names. Don't forget to leave them a comment (you're it) and to read their blog. You can't tag the person who tagged you.

XXOX Jus

I used to be Snow White -- but I drifted. ~~~Mae West


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