The Old Night  

Kaliedascope61 42M
3157 posts
5/13/2006 8:29 pm

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5/26/2006 2:33 pm

The Old Night

The Old Night

The candle flickered on the bed side table, and I tossed my body into a twisted sleep. The last light of the fire had died hours ago, but I could still smell the fireside swirling in the breeze sneaking into the window.

The old night had not given me the peace I desired, nor did it grant me the gift of comfort. It had forsaken me as it had so many times before. I am alone, in the dead air of the night, as the cold steel of numbness took me into a familiar darkness.

A dream is what I wanted. It is where I needed to go to escape, a comfort that forgetting brings. These things can not be forced, and I can not conjure an angel to shine bright and watch over me, protection is not afforded in the last hours before morning.

Peace is a lie to sweep the young into oblivion, a lying kiss on a forehead. There is a price for redemption and the cloud will always hover over me. Pity is for a fool, and tears are golden, they are the only thing true in this world. Everything good can be forged through tears. There can never be love with out pain. There can never be a heaven with out a hell. I would never appreciate it otherwise.

I turn in my sleep, trying to find that one cool spot of comfort on the sheets. I am searching for a cool anchor that will force my body to remain quiet and still in a sea of shattered glass. I cannot turn my brain off. It is forcing me to remember. Haunting everything that I wish to see, turning green fields into asphalt.

Another cigarette, another thought in a vise grip. This night is different. The air is different, it smells different. There is no sound, I cannot hear the breeze rustling the leaves, but I can feel its fingers brush across my back making me twitch as if it were making sure I stayed awake.



rm_gerson42 53M
2419 posts
5/13/2006 9:14 pm

Probably a repeat statement. Sometimes you can sense a story, see a vision of the readers interpretation of the written word. Your words often have this effect on me. Thanks.


Kaliedascope61 replies on 5/14/2006 5:26 am:
Thank you, thats what I try to invoke when I write things like this.

tillerbabe 57F

5/14/2006 12:09 am

Chilling....I wish you peace and restful sleep.


Kaliedascope61 replies on 5/14/2006 5:27 am:
Don't worry powderpuff its fiction

runzwithknives 61F

5/14/2006 5:21 am

Haunting, Kal. Hope you have rested easy now...

Hugs
Rosa


Kaliedascope61 replies on 5/14/2006 2:10 pm:
No rest for the wicked.

Whispersoftly5 53F
15176 posts
5/14/2006 5:46 am

Wow, I could feel this one. The way you write is so clear - your words make me feel as though I'm walking into a picture and seeing everything a bit closer - a bit more real.

Whisper...


Kaliedascope61 replies on 5/14/2006 2:10 pm:
that was my intent, and thank you for letting me know, these are my favorite type of comments. These are the ones that let me know I accomplished what I set out to do.

playrigal2 60F

5/14/2006 6:42 am

wow...fiction? this was good!


Kaliedascope61 replies on 5/14/2006 7:08 am:
are there two of you?

rm_PurryKitty2 49M/51F
9753 posts
5/14/2006 6:43 am

Touching!

Purry {=}

Purry


waerlookin4fun 51M/47F

5/14/2006 12:02 pm

You are truly talented......you make the reader feel the story, thanks


Kaliedascope61 replies on 5/14/2006 2:09 pm:
that was my intent, and thank you so much for letting me know.

HBowt2 60F

5/14/2006 12:33 pm

some blogs you read...others you absorb...taking in each word....
each line evoking a remembered sense....and you take the feel of the writing away with you long after you have forgotten how the words were formed........


Kaliedascope61 replies on 5/14/2006 2:08 pm:
You can say the same about reactions also, this is one of the best compliments I have recieved about anything I've posted.

MWWwantsmore 52F

5/14/2006 2:44 pm

Very moving and powerful words, reminds me of one of my favorite authors...........Stephen King


Kaliedascope61 replies on 5/14/2006 3:01 pm:
Stephen King? really? how so?

EroticaXTC 51F

5/14/2006 5:49 pm

Not every story I read, truth or fiction, captures my attention...and keeps it...
someone mentioned "haunting", that's true, but I would also add "evocative" as a description for everything you write...
you have a gift kalie


Kaliedascope61 replies on 5/14/2006 5:55 pm:
You guys are certainly making me believe so.

DAISYDUKE1004 51F
534 posts
5/14/2006 7:30 pm

Man, I love your style...I could truly feel it...Thanks...~D~


want2play926 46F

5/16/2006 11:49 am

This is great! I could feel it...


_RoSe_ 48F
994 posts
5/16/2006 11:31 pm

Absolutely Wonderful...thank you for sharing, fiction or not, alot of us have had nights similar. Atleast I have.

"A life without passion is not a life; it is merely an existence."
~Rose~


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