Time Out........  

Goodlovinguy0 43M
123 posts
6/29/2006 2:54 pm

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7/7/2006 2:23 pm

Time Out........

Missing the road & the way it winds,

Feeling the breeze with it's trail behind,

Sucking in the cool misty freshness of morning,

The sky so pale in it's snowy-whiteness,

Alone in thought with much to search out,

Filling the expanse of private heaven,

The cloud breaks & scatters asunder now,

Glorious pure rays of first sunlight come down,

Breaking and falling on my frozen brow,

Warming the moment to the early hour's delight,

Walking far & away from the trodden path,

This is the journey & it cannot be repeated,

Once more it shines & falls that light of above,

Pleasing my path the whole way home for now.

rm_mmmgoodnova 107M/107F
1259 posts
6/29/2006 3:18 pm

Lovely poem. Yours?

I like "Filling the expanse of private heaven" and "warming the moment to the early hour's delight." Actually, I like the words in the context (or at least, what I perceive the context) that you probably intended. But they also make me think you could use these turns of phrase in a sort of heated erotic poem, too. (Yes, sorry, just how my mind works.)

& "Pleasing my path" is also lovely...never heard it put that way but I think I know just what you mean. (This time I am not even thinking of sex!)

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