Reluctant Gift  

yagottalikit 49F
824 posts
11/4/2005 11:15 pm

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3/23/2008 1:43 am

Reluctant Gift

I cautiously give myself to you
for when I give me ~ I give all
I open the gate to this fortress I've built
from foundation up ~ solid and tall
don't bring in a wrecking ball

Should you accept this gift that I give ~
it will arrive whole and intact
don't then decide you won't need it in full
and start sending small pieces back
no returns if it isn't exact

Assembling this product, this labor of love
took patience ~ persistence and years
parts were scattered ~ tools hard to find ~
instructions were vague and unclear
crafted from blood ~ sweat and tears

I beg you to choose to refuse my gift
if it just isn't going to fit
"I cannot receive all that you offer"
I hope that you'll freely admit
but, then be prepared to exit

© copyright 2005 by Yagottalikit


Yagotta get it soft and wet so we can kick/stick it


Sizzle364
(Juan S)
52M
2642 posts
11/5/2005 12:17 am

I have felt this same way before, but I was unable to put it as eloquently as you just did.


goddessofbitches 41M/33F

11/5/2005 9:05 am

That was really moving. THanks for sharing...

HUGS~~~MANDY goddessofbitches

Always The Bitch


yagottalikit 49F
583 posts
11/5/2005 10:24 am

Sizzlin' baby ~ funny how you use the word "eloquently"....I usually don't do the rhyming thing with poetry.....so I thought it sounded a little "cheesy"....but, it get's the message across in a unique way......and that's what I like to do!

Yagotta get it soft and wet so we can kick/stick it


drnick20054 28M

11/5/2005 4:54 pm

well this is off topic but how was ur daughters b-day?


yagottalikit 49F
583 posts
11/5/2005 7:42 pm

Mandy ~ Thank you! And I still want to see that tattoo (in private, of course!)

Yagotta get it soft and wet so we can kick/stick it


yagottalikit 49F
583 posts
11/5/2005 7:44 pm

Drnick ~ not that time of the month, yet....

Yagotta get it soft and wet so we can kick/stick it


AlterNative58 58M
126 posts
11/6/2005 6:32 pm

since you posted this, i have been trying to create a comment that fits, but i think sizzle stole the thunder here...which is koolz...he is so correct...but you've done it with such an economy of words (i know there's a word for that, but its not coming to me right now)...and it is visceral also..."don't bring in a wrecking ball"...i almost hear a song here, have you ever given that a thought?


yagottalikit 49F
583 posts
11/6/2005 8:45 pm

AlterNative ~ damn cool handle guy......ummm.....have I said that before? A song? A COUNTRY song, no less!!!! No, I couldn't possibly fathom any words I write being made into a song....it would be a sad, sad situation. I think the crap I write is meant to READ...not SING!

Yagotta get it soft and wet so we can kick/stick it


AlterNative58 58M
126 posts
11/7/2005 5:29 am

yagotta, ummm, yes, you have told me that before and its high time i said thank you (i would have done so before, but for some reason, this site won't let me send you e-mail...you know, something's wrong when they let me e-mail somebody from BFE and not somebody right up the road )...so, thank you, i think its kool that YOU like it

now, as far as what you write here...country? ummm, NO, not what i had in mind...for instance, this post here i felt like i heard a song more along the lines of a STAIND, GODSMACK or even DISTURBED song...but with that said, i have to agree with you, TO THE EXTENT, that the thoughts (NOT crap) you write here are to read, but that they show the potential of your being able to write lyrics...in my humble opinion...know what i mean?


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