Love sonnet, based on Shakespeare's 18th sonnet  

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11/28/2005 11:11 am

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Love sonnet, based on Shakespeare's 18th sonnet


As a creative exercise I tried my hand at updating or a variation on Will Shakespeare's 18th sonnet. Why not imitate the best? I know his poem is better!

Something different from watching football games.

Shakespeare's first, then my variation:

XVIII

Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?
Thou art more lovely and more temperate:
Rough winds do shake the darling buds of May,
And summer's lease hath all too short a date:
Sometime too hot the eye of heaven shines,
And often is his gold complexion dimmed,
And every fair from fair sometime declines,
By chance, or nature's changing course untrimmed:
But thy eternal summer shall not fade,
Nor lose possession of that fair thou ow'st,
Nor shall death brag thou wander'st in his shade,
When in eternal lines to time thou grow'st,
So long as men can breathe, or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this gives life to thee.

Would I compare you to a bright Summer day?
Unfair! You are more lovely, soft and sweet!
Cold windy rain sullies flowering May
And summer fruit’s too soon unfit to eat!
Sometimes too hot, the Sun shines torrid
Other times cold clouds fogs the sky too dim,
Humid heat and bugs make Summer horrid,
And Summer sharks will bite and eat a limb!
But your eternal Summer can never fade,
The bright beauty you most fairly possess,
Not time, not death, nor other means can shade,
While loving thought remains here to confess,
So long as humans breathe or have eyes to see,
So long lives this breath, giving life to thee!

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