That First Night - (Caution: Song Under Construction(8))  

luther672 49M
27 posts
8/28/2005 10:21 am

Last Read:
3/5/2006 9:27 pm

That First Night - (Caution: Song Under Construction(8))

On that first night
I wanted you with me
Breathing and crying
Singing and sighing my name.
But it wasn't right
on that first night.

At that first dance
I wanted you closer
Nearer and warmer
than the heat on my skin.
Didn't know how to begin,
Not on that first night.

And never once did i tell myself, "Never again"
I just had to tell my heart "Wait, it's not 'if' but just 'when'"
When would you be mine
And how could love be right
after that first night.

And now that you're with me,
Longing to kiss me,
Seaching for way to say you miss me
at the end of the day,
How could I not love you
with all my might ?
When I know that all that comes between us
Would turn out right...
And that I still love you here and now
...and it's not that first night.

End

I was thinking of fine tuning the lyric a bit but the son of one of my friends read it and told me he liked it. The boy is just 13 and he got it and understood it! So I think it stays as is. Let me know what you think.

l.


MillsShipsGayly 51M

8/28/2005 12:28 pm

It has potential I think. Good luck.


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