The Evil Twin  

absolutelynormal 56F
6016 posts
5/15/2006 9:37 am

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5/29/2006 1:17 pm

The Evil Twin

She'd been dating Peter for a few months, she knew he had a a twin brother but had never met him. Today she was going to.

As they drove to his apartment they chit-chatted about his twin, Paul. "We look very much alike, sometimes Mom has a hard time telling us apart if we "try" to fool her." "We'll coordinate it ahead of time, make the same facial expressions, which we kinda do already anyway, just more exacting when we try" said Peter. "You won't try that with me will you? asked Jill. "Noway", was Peter's reply.

They got to the apartment and Paul greeted them at the door. He shook her hand but hugged his brother, when they hugged she was amazed at how much they looked alike. She was glad they had different clothing styles.

Peter was a preppy guy, always dressed neatly in khakis and Izod type shirts, his brother had on jeans and a tshirt. Jill had to admit he looked great in those low cut jeans with a shirt so tight she could see his 6 pack.

He caught her checking him out, and smiled but said nothing about it. She felt bad, she loved Peter, but this was like admiring his body they looked so very much alike.

They stayed for a bit but had to be at a graduation planning committee meeting so they left rather quickly. She told Paul that it was nice to meet him and she meant it.

They sat in the meeting, she found herself daydreaming about Paul and what it would be like to take that shirt off of him and run her hands all over his chest...Jill, you with us?, someone asked. Yeah, sorry she replied.

After the meeting Peter took her home. She kissed him quickly in the car and bounded out, ran into her apartment.

SHe was studying for her art appreciation final when the phone rang. "Hey, I know you're studying but I stopped by the Redline and they have a special on your favorite drink, come join me, I won't keep you here long." She thought about it, decided she could use the break and that one drink wouldn't impair her studying. "I'll be there in about 20 minutes"
she said.

She got to the bar, found him and they sat at a table while she drank a Long Island Ice Tea.
They were talking quietly when suddenly Peter leaned across the table and kissed her. He just didn't do things like that, but she liked it and she kissed back, slipping her tongue into his hot mouth.

She pulled back and broke the kiss, saying "Baby, this just isn't like you, you're not into public displays of affection." "You just look so enticing tonight and you have on that great perfume, I just wanna eat you up" he said.

He put his hand on her leg under the table. She had on a short skirt, and no hose, bare legged. Her skin was incredibly soft and smooth. His hand climbed higher and higher. Jill jumped up and said, "I better go, I have to study."

"Let me come help you study, I swear I'll keep my hands to myself if that's what you want." He said. They walked to her car, he got in, she drove back to her apartment.

He ran his fingers lightly down the side of her neck as she drove, making her shiver and giggle. "Stop it, I'm trying to drive!"

When they walked into the apartment, He grabbed her, pushed her up against the wall, pinning her with that fine body of his and kissed her thoroughly. She was moaning and grinding into him. He pulled his face back, but kept his body tightly against hers.

"Do you want me to stop?" he inquired. She grabbed him and resumed kissing him and undulating against his rock hard cock.
She pulled his collared shirt over his head, ran her hands over his chest and abs, feeling his smooth skin and the soft downy hair on his chest and belly.

He unbuttoned her blouse. She pushed his hands away, he was doing it too slow. She pulled her shirt off and pulled him against her, he reached behind and unfastened the bra. He threw it to the side. He needed to feel her, skin on skin. He held her to him and kissed her again. It was like liquid fire for both of them when they kissed. Made them burn deep inside.

He kissed her neck where he had been lightly touching it earlier. Ran his tongue around the top of her ear and down her neck. She was moaning and wiggling her pleasure. He worked his way down to those succulent nipples. They were full, standing at attention, wanting attention.
He licked, he sucked, he twirled his tongue, he flicked the nipples with it and drove her crazy with need.

She said, fuck me, please, I can't stand anymore of this it feels too damn good, so good it hurts.
Just a little more, please he said and made that pouty face that she always gave in to.

He unzipped her skirt, slid it down. She had on panties with Hello Kitty on them, how appropriate he thought. He touched her with the panties on, her panties were sopping. She bucked against his hand. She said one word, it wasn't so much the word as the way she said it,she said "please."

He had those panties off in less than 2 seconds. His face was between her legs in less than 5.
She spread her legs wide for him. A sharp intake of air, almost a hiss was the response to his tongue. She tasted so good to him, sweet, salty, musky.

He slid his hands under her ass and pulled her toward the edge of the bed. He settled down between her legs, his knees on the oriental rug beside her bed. He proceeded to "eat her out" in almost magnanimous fashion. She came for him a couple of times before begging for him inside her.

He slipped the condom on, the latex free one just in case, cause ya never know who is allergic and who isn't. He climbed on top of her, she ran her smooth legs up and down his thighs. She reached between their legs gently grabbing "him", guiding him to where he needed to be.
He was average size, he slid in easily because she was so aroused, so slick and ready for him.
MMMMMMMmmmm she said. He was going slow, enjoying the feel of being stroked and massaged by something other than his own hand.

She wrapped her legs around him. She increased the pace of the rhythm. Damn he thought to himself, he didn't know how much more he could take before he exploded into a happy ending.
She said, "I want on top." He hoped pulling out of her and the few seconds it took to change positions would help.

She put pillows, a bunch of them up against he head board and said "you go there." He did as he was told. "Slide down a bit" she instructed. Again he did exactly as told.

She climbed on top of him. Guided his cock into to her. She had her hands on either side f his head on the pillows, it wasn't working. He slid up a tad and she grabbed the headboard. Her tits were right in his face. He looked at one and then the other, not sure which to take first.
he pushed them together, sweeping his tongue from left to right over her sensitive nipples. that made her moan and grind into him even harder.

Suddenly she sat straight up, different angle, it was all good. He's pumping hard against her weight. Her eyes are rolled back in her head.
She starts playing with her clit while he's sliding in and out of her. It's the sexiest thing he's ever seen. Her tongue has grabbed her top lip. He thought she was biting it, but no, she's sucking it.

He can feel her climax building. Everything is tightening up around him.
Her breathing is ragged, she's moaning, head thrown back. Suddenly she slows everything down and just grinds him as hard as she can with this certain little rhythm. She comes and it's loud. It's also wet.

She reaches behind her, puts her hand between his legs and starts caressing his balls. She reaches under them and caresses there too and he can't contain it anymore. It's the best orgasm he's had in a very long time.

She collapses on top of him and says, "OMG, that was the best yet baby!" They cuddle and relax.
She's almost asleep when the doorbell rings. He is asleep. She quietly gets up, slips on her robe and goes to the door.
She opens it and he says "Surprise, I came to help you study." She has a confused look on her face. Then she realizes what has happened.

It's OK, I'm gonna go ahead and turn in now cause I'm so tired. I'm going to study in the morning, why don't you come help me then?

He looks confused too. Something is wrong and he knows it. He looks over her shoulder, he can see into the bedroom. He sees a pair of hiking boots in the floor, like someone threw them off in a hurry. He recognizes them. They belong to his brother.

He pushes past Jill, goes into the bedroom and starts beating Paul with his fists while he's still asleep. Peter is screaming at him "why do you do this?, why do you have to ruin everything!" He has done this to all my girlfriends and promised me that he wouldn't do it to anyone else.

Peter gets the baseball bat out from under her bed. He hits Paul with it. Paul is begging him to stop. Jill is trying to pull him off. He pushes her, her head hits the desk and she slides to the floor.
He keeps whaling away on Paul, he finally hits his head. It makes a sickening sound, Paul slumps to the bed.

Peter looks around at what he's done. I didn't mean to do this he thinks to himself. He decides he better get out of the apartment and fast. He goes out the front door, oblivious to the way he looks. He has blood allover his shirt.

He's running down the stairs, a policeman is coming up the stairs. Peter realizes he still has the bat in his hand. The cop draws his Glock and points it at Peter. Peter draws back to swing, the round strikes his right in the center of the chest. He's dead before he hits the ground.

Lautreamont 50M

5/15/2006 11:38 am

petite morte as foreplay for the Reaper, didnĀ“t expected that ending...brrrr

absolutelynormal replies on 5/15/2006 12:07 pm:
Oh, I love it when you speak French to me.

rm_gerson42 52M
2419 posts
5/15/2006 11:39 am

So.... this is the inner Mac. An incredibly steamy and hot sex scene sandwiched between two very different varities of bread. What next will she reveal? I enjoyed your story and the writing of it. You are very descriptive and the way she said "please" got me hot. Thank you for sharing it. gerson

absolutelynormal replies on 5/15/2006 12:07 pm:
Thank you G

chasingfun27 38M
1108 posts
5/15/2006 11:53 am

I envy your creative ability. That was a good bit of work. Rather brooding, with its themes of sex and death.

absolutelynormal replies on 5/15/2006 12:25 pm:
Thank you very much Mac

rm_mmmgoodnova 106M/106F
1259 posts
5/15/2006 10:59 pm

mwahahaha...Mac kills all of her boys.... Kidding...great job as always...see the other thread. Sheesh, I can never off my guys (the ones in my stories), they fuck too well. (But maybe I should...there's always more talent available in blogland!)

absolutelynormal replies on 5/16/2006 9:42 am:
So write a story where they are lousy in bed and your female character bumps 'em off cause they don't know how to do it right, lol

AndyUnique 68M

5/16/2006 2:06 am

The story reminds me of a movie from some years back titled Dead Ringer. Similar and yet different in a strange way. Your story is very good, IMHO. Hope it wasn't a true account of a chapter in your life. (We have enough PTSD to go around) . So well written too.


absolutelynormal replies on 5/16/2006 9:41 am:
OOOoooo I saw that movie, it was beyond scary and weird. No, not a true account. You're right we have enough PSTD here, we should start our own support group. Thanks for your kind compliment and for visiting my blog Mac

digdug41 49M

5/16/2006 9:10 am

MAc that was awesome I really enjoyed that see what a conversation with me can do

roaming the cyber streets of blogland

absolutelynormal replies on 5/16/2006 9:39 am:
Thanks DD. You were talking about the other story I wrote where the wife kills the hubby and I knew it freaked you out, so I thought this one might too. Glad you liked Mac


5/16/2006 10:26 am

I really put aside an hour for comenting and am way behind. I was randomly ging from post to post. Saw yours was short and thought SWEET! Then you asked for me to read the long and thought okay. I am glad I did! Best read in a quite a while. Awesome post and wasnt expecting that! Thanks gurl! You rock and look forward to more! Guess bigger is better, lol! {=}

just a squirrel trying to get a nut

absolutelynormal replies on 5/16/2006 10:44 am:
Wow, thanks. You put a big smile on my face

rm_yukonpaul 51M
1120 posts
5/17/2006 2:18 am

I am impressed! Well worth the read. I usually don't like to read the long posts, but that was good.

absolutelynormal 56F
6563 posts
5/17/2006 6:08 am

Thank you Paul Thanks for taking the time to actually read and to tell me what you think

ProtonicMan 48M

5/17/2006 10:08 pm

Good stuff, as usual, Mac. I just wish I had had the time to read it when you first posted it. *Note to self: Don't piss Mac off.*


absolutelynormal replies on 5/18/2006 3:55 am:
Awww TJ, what if I had made the twins women, would that have suited you better? LOL, I started to do it that way but had already written most of it just for the sex stuff and it just came to me to do it this way.

Intensity4U 52M  
7432 posts
5/19/2006 6:49 am

Hey Mac, I guess there won't be a sequel unless it's about Jill starting from scratch again. I enjoyed the "telling" and think you re-affirmed my statement that erotica written by women is not so predictable - I definitely wasn't expecting that type of climatic ending.

After the first attack though I was looking for a second identity twist... with "The Evil Twin" title, I was anticipating you might reveal that "Peter with the baseball bat" was actually Paul who had just taken advantage of doing away with his brother first then taking his girl. But, you took care of both twins. So... which one was THE Evil Twin - the evil lecher or the evil murderer?

absolutelynormal replies on 5/19/2006 2:35 pm:
That's the question you have to answer for yourself.

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