Just another Rant  

ThePartyMonster 44M
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7/4/2006 7:45 am

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8/11/2006 10:39 am

Just another Rant

I stand proud, just not as proud as I used to be
I'd stand strong, but somethings wrong with me
I've defeated endless enemies, but one got thru
against this ageless enemy, what am I to do?
I tried to fight just not strong enough
I tried to remember just not bright enough
I raise my fist to the air, but to no avail
why is it I'm destined to fail?
My rage carried me for so long
I used it, now it's all gone
I stand weak and nearly defeated
not knowing how to fight fears so deep seated
Anger flares as I continue to stand alone
cause hell is all I've known
I tried to fight, just not strong enough
I tried to retreat, just not smart enough
I lay before the enemy that brought my fall
How can I defeat something that attacks us all?
I've tried loving, laughing, crying, and raging
but nothing defeats this enemy called aging....

fun4sher 69F

7/4/2006 9:47 am

A 33 year old speaking of aging?

in the line "not knowing how to fight fears so deep seated" change the deep to deeply, flows better....just a suggestion.

As I look back down the trail
I have traveled

I feel that I have a cause that failed
All my fears beome unraveled

Challenged by life to overcome
I fight daily to be the one

I strive always to be my best
in this lifelong searching quest

the trail I saw was not the one
the trail I see is is all but done

I cannot change the past from here
only look to the future near

My time has come to leave this life
I only regret leaving my wife

She will have to be strong and stand alone
her penance for staying with these old bones

ThePartyMonster 44M

7/9/2006 11:24 am

Thanks for the imput.. I really appreciate it.

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