Please help me to decide  

AnEnigma517 59M
243 posts
12/21/2005 6:34 am

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3/5/2006 9:27 pm

Please help me to decide

Hi, it’s me… just making a quick stop to ask younses a little favor. (Some help with one of those things I need to sort out.) A couple of weeks ago, I had sent my first package of my True Confessions series to an obscure magazine I had found in the directory that I use. Figured it would be an easy start; like to “test the waters” so to speak. Their “ad” in the directory says: “Unsolicited Material Welcome” (that means if you don’t have an agent), and “Top Dollar Paid for Original Work” (da! Of course it’s original… what, they’re going to pay for plagiarism?!) Anyway, today, I got my first package back from these folks, with a “form” letter that kind of rudely said:

”To: Contributor

We will only review one submission at a time. Please select your best work and re-submit.”

That was it… no “Thank you" or "Have a nice day" or anything else. (I’m surprised they even sent back my package… I guess maybe they were thinking lawsuit if I happened to notice them in the magazine at some later date without seeing a matching check from them in my bank account.) I mean, who the fuck to these people think they are?!?! Even Playboy and Cosmo have the decency to put your name in the “Dear… “ line, and they sign off with a “Thank You”.

So, here’s my dilemma -- (I don’t know why I’m even bothering… they only pay 2 cents per word… huge windfall there, eh?) Of the eight installments listed below, which do you think is the “best work”… If you could be so kind as to take another look at them, then leave me a little note back here, and it doesn’t even have to be anything elaborate, something like “TC 1” or “3” or something simple like that.

Thanks in advance…

True Confessions #1 - The Laundry Chute
True Confessions # 2 - Under Margaret
True Confessions #3 - Through the window
True Confessions #4 - Katherine
True Confessions #5 - Sweet Dream?
True Confessions #6 - Sloppy Seconds...
True Confessions #7 - Caught with my pants down...
True Confessions #8 - Nosey Neighbors

dasher121 36M

12/21/2005 10:55 am

TP- first off, great stories. They really captured what it is like to be a young boy/teen when you begin to try to understand sexual urges and curiousity. My hat's off to you on the well written and described events.
I had a very difficult time deciding which two were my favorites. They were all so well written and the fact that you tied alot of them together so nicely, I really couldnt imagine one without the others.
I did manage to narrow it down to two:
#5- Sweet Dream? (the intensity of the situation and how unexpectedly she reacted.)
#7- Caught with my pants down (because, quite frankly, that was just a very hot and steamy story lol.)
Anyway, sorry to ramble on and hope that helps. Good luck to you

tillerbabe 56F

12/21/2005 10:28 pm

I need more time..but never fear! I'll be back!

curious082385 31F
4925 posts
12/22/2005 2:52 am

They are all gave us a tough assignment trying to choose a favorite.
I'm going to have to go with #5 Sweet Dream? as my top pick. Your words captured the intensity and anxiety of the situation. There was also a subtle sensuality and intimacy behind the words.

rm_1hotwahine 63F
21091 posts
12/22/2005 11:11 am

I'll go read now (Dasher sent me ) but had to comment on the post - as soon as I read the first line I thought, "This guy HAS to be from within a 50 mile radius of where I grew up." I knew it. And you probably know why!

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AnEnigma517 59M

12/22/2005 11:26 am

Somewhere in Western PA Wahine? Where we say "wooshington" not "washington" and "crick" not "creek" ... and that all time favorite the "GineIggle" Let me catch you up on what you've missed!

rm_1hotwahine 63F
21091 posts
12/22/2005 11:32 am

Okay, I'm back. I think that Sweet Dreams was the one that held my attention the most. And I didn't read that others said that until just now, btw.

My suggestion is that if you are going to submit just one, then re-read it as you might want to edit out references to others in the series. Also, you need to explain MILF, esp since it's a newer term and your stories are retro. Incidentally, they had a very authentic feel, both for time and place.

This is good.

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rm_1hotwahine 63F
21091 posts
12/22/2005 7:30 pm

The standing joke back home is...where do people who live on Maui go for their vacation? Steubenville! Yep. It's true. I just don't admit it very often, lol.

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AnEnigma517 59M

12/22/2005 7:46 pm

Ah, Stuebenville... close enought to us strange ones in Western Pennsylvania... we call that part of the "Tri-State Area". (That's about 30 miles from me; I live near Greater Pitt airport, although that name got changed when they built the new airport: "Pittsburgh International Airport" -- sounds more, uh, distinguished, I guess! Thanks for your input...

dasher121 36M

12/23/2005 5:35 am

its funny the language barriers for just the city isnt it. i grew up on the side of the rivers that says "yins"
theres also "yuns" "younses" for different part.
and yeah, i do say woorshington.
keller instead of color
i have a bad accent at times, epsecially when strong emotion comes out

rm_1hotwahine 63F
21091 posts
12/25/2005 9:59 am

somethin like 'at
je - wy sandwich (hard one to write - l's like w's)
I'll meet someone sometimes and within two minutes can figure out they;re from back then, even if they haven't lived there since childhood.
OK, now I have to regroup and think of you both talking like that. Ohmigod, it just occurred to me that Saintli must talk like that, too!

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